Observation in a Story

Have you ever noticed that the best news stories are descriptive?

Not just description of the scene or the facts of the story, but relating the nuances so readers develop a full picture of what is happening. A full picture of people involved emerges as readers are engaged with details. Details that encourage deeper thought and feelings, perhaps even empathize.

A good story adds human interest.

It reminds the reader that real people are involved. A picture may tell a thousand words, but those thousand words bring it to life. Words also capture elements that a quote may not be fully able to articulate. It captures the mood. Quotes provide insight, but the nonverbal communication – the wringing of the hands, the wiping sweat from the brow, and the tearful look of anguish – gives power to quotes.

Wearing a suit too big, Davion’s caseworker adjusts his tie outside the church. TAMPA BAY TIMES

I reread the news article, Amid churchgoers, orphan Davion Only pleads for a family, by DeGregory, Lane. The writer paints a scene of a boy who is scared and nervous, but who is also desperately attempting to change his future. It depicts a boy who does not have much. With hope and courage, he is willing to take risks to gain something better. It reflects a boy in desperation.

To recap, a good story draws in the reader. A greater writer seamlessly articulates observation into the story. I am not there, yet.